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who is she
she with the charcoal lids
wet lips
mascara smeared
round hips

she with the the torn stockings
her bra strap faultering
just over her shoulder
smile that could be a frown
scornful lips mocking

she can't see her beauty
the pain leaves her alone
she finds friends in fucking
gives herself to anyone
who'll take her home

she with the bruises
deeper than skin
deeper than any eyes would
care to begin
to see

she is someones daughter
someones sister
someones mother
someones friend
everyones lover

she smites the pain
with rough lips and kisses
in dark alleyways
day old stubble
in strange rooms
brutal unforgiving thrusts
she stabs at her heart, everyday
everyday

she who doesnt cry
but inside
she dies

she slaughters her existence
with latex
cigarette smoke
faces with no names
friendly smiles with much to gain

she
who I want
so badly
to heal

but she is nothing
without the pain
it makes her real
it fills her cup
gives her purpose
the only thing she
truly feels

and life for her would not be the same
with out mutilating her soul
to realize her purpose

she kills her self to live
everyday, every way

I watch her
I hate her
I love her

I want to break her.
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S H E by aelis

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burningrage Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2005
That's probably the best poem I have ever read, I'm not bull shittin either, that's really good...
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phix850 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2004
Interesting finish to this glass of wine.
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kriticos Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2004
This is to beautiful possibly the best

i feel shame that i can explain just how amazing this is

Fantastic work :clap:
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formaldehyde Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2002  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
its been a while since ive read a poem that affected me that much
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preacha Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2002
just came back to tell you that this poem still makes me feel excessively lame. i'll kick your ass one day, watch out
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ap3x Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2002
this is great thank you for giving me the link to this.

she with the bruises
deeper than skin
deeper than any eyes would
care to begin
to see

she is someones daughter
someones sister
someones mother
someones friend
everyones lover

that part really grabbed me and threw me around like a rag doll.
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rebelchic Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2002
painfilled and heartbreaking this is a piece that will be in my head for a while. everything involved was said to that extent that there was nothing left for the reader to even have to think of...you have said it all with this.
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eternityforgotten Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2002
wow
this is such an amazing and touching poem...
worst thing is i know someone like that... sigh... this poem fits too perfectly with her..
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couchfry Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2002
what the.............? how could i not have seen this until now. absolutely great, nothing less and nothing more. simply great. leaves you with your jaw on the floor as what you've just read still runs through the alleys in your thoughts. like we'd say: SICK!! damn..............
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tanya Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2002
Just because I'm terrible at commenting on poetry doesn't mean I don't like this. :) (Smile)
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jsenn Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2002
There is such anguish in this poem, such dissappointment and frustration in not being able to help this one see. It is the hardest thing to help one who cannot see past their own pain. You wrote this very well. The emotion is tremendous.
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bluenine Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2002
Most definitely a poem that breathes life into words. This is truly an impressive and inspiring piece. I haven't chosen anything for my favorites for quite some time...but this is quite worthy. Thank you for sharing your amazing work with us.
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hempingway Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2002
I'm finally getting back to trying to describe how provocative and well scripted this poem is... The imagery it provokes astounds me, and everything is described beautifully... I can't wait until you finish the books such as the carousel one and whatnot, because those will be some interesting reads... :D (Big Grin)
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What have I become? I am not mute, yet I speak with my fingers, I am not deaf, yet I hear with my eyes, I am not paralyzed, yet I am bound to this chair...
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whomever Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2002
so sweet man this is the best poem i've seen in a long time
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hempingway Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2002
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What have I become? I am not mute, yet I speak with my fingers, I am not deaf, yet I hear with my eyes, I am not paralyzed, yet I am bound to this chair...
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cooper Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
HOLY shit, if I could only write emotions and words as powerful and lovely as this.... as one has said before, you make my writing look so boring..... wonderful work, take care :O (Eek)

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preacha Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2002
you make me feel lame
noones done that before
i hate you :) (Smile)

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faithwalker Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Student Photographer
Beautiful paradox! This speaks volumes.

Great work!

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greg47 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
Everyone else has covered it. The only thing left for me to say is: l33t!

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karnjerrylow Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
nice... she started out beautiful... In my mind... then she just turned... it's like an aging teen...

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dashzero Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Professional Photographer
AMAZING i really like it :) (Smile)

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hallot Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002   Writer
very great work. I don't know how you came up with the subject, but it's very well handled.
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amobea Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
hmmm life of a crack whore...

very well done poem
i didn't like the flow at the very begining
but otherwise one of the best poems i've read in a while

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keeb Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
sounds very much like lyrics to a song.. seximified, with a little bit of silk vagina.. :) (Smile)

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ekud Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Professional Digital Artist
what san said..... any critique i could leave on this piece could not possibly match its eloquence, so im just going to add it to my favourites and commend you on quite possibly the best poem i've ever read on this site...

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possiblyben Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
I agree with everyone.. The imagery is fantastic.

This poem draws from alot of emotion, and also pulls out alot of emotion for myself. Just reading it I can feel the -wanting- to help, the feeling that your cant help.. The love, the friendship.. the hatred.

Very awesome words Aelis..

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orbital Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Professional Interface Designer
Aelis, I have never read anything like this and I have been thinking it for years. I need some way to express my feelings... nah, you did it for me. I don't think I could ever write like this. This makes me feel such a board spectrum of feelings that it's really fucking hard to comment on this.

-sigh- Crying

speech has no meaning to me.


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ineffable Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
well.. id go off like san and nie but .. they pretty much said it all. very nice ael :) (Smile)

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nieman Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002
oh my... jaw dropping, aelis. it's so descriptive i can picture the girl perfectly.. or maybe not descriptive, as much as; its the perfect words to inspire such memories, and thoughts inside the reader, without telling it exactly... i say 'the reader' but it sounds so impersonal.. you hit ME hard aelis.. its a magnificent poem, a whole novel in a poem. its... jaw dropping and mind provoking
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sanguru Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
omg...

i have not read a poem in so long that makes me feel the way this one. i don't just want to leave another "amazing imagery" and "touching" poem comments. this is beyond that, this is just... speechless wonder...

if i could cry, it would have cried to this piece... amazing work aelis, the best i have ever read from you... touching in every aspect. just wow, i love it.
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